Welcome back to Romantic Friday Writers. This week's theme is
heart-stopper. I’m sharing a snippet from HWB. In this scene, Kola does something
he’s never done with any other woman. He kisses Tari of his own volition. It’s
a heart-stopping moment for him. I hope you agree. Enjoy.
Word Count: 400 (MPA)
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“Nike is such a lovely kid.”
At the sound of her velvety voice, Kola turned and saw the
object of his torturous thoughts standing just outside the side door. The
spotlights reflecting off the pool turned Tari’s dress into gossamer. He could
see the outline of her body underneath it. His heart stopped for a moment. His
breath caught in his throat. When his heart restarted, it set a furious pace
sending all his blood southwards.
“She is a good kid,” he responded to her words, acknowledging
her spell-binding presence.
Propelled by an inexplicable force, he moved forward. She didn’t
move from the spot. Instead she watched him intently as he closed in on her.
Deep down he knew he had to connect with her like he’d never done before. When
he got within arm’s length, he stopped.
Did he really want to do this? It had nearly floored him the first time
around. He knew it would change things permanently this time around.
From his position he could see her face clearly. He feasted
his eyes on her. Her eyes, with their dilated pupils, appeared greener, brighter,
and warmer – the smouldering emerald hue overshadowing their normally hazel
tint. Her smooth skin had a luminosity that reminded him of caramel fudge. The
urge to taste her overwhelmed him. He consciously licked his lips even as he
stilled himself. He watched her soft lips part as if in response to his action,
an open invitation to tempt him. His already shaky resistance crumbled in that
instant.
“What the hell,” he growled as he grabbed her shoulders,
pulling her into his arms, crushing her lips with his. To say she was surprised
was an understatement. He could feel her body stiffen, her lips freeze. How could
he blame her? He was the one breaking his own rules. As much as he was hungry
for her, he needed to know she was with him every step of the way.
He flicked his tongue across the edges of her lips. They
tasted of vanilla. He wanted to taste more of her. His tongue probed her lips.
“Open for me, baby,” he whispered against her lips. She gave a soft sigh before
letting him in, her warm breath feathering his cheek. He took his time tasting
her sweet inner recesses, his tongue deep in her mouth. There was no need to
rush.
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So was that heart-stopping enough for you? Share your
thoughts and comments. Remember to check out the other submissions for this
week too by using the RFW link above. Have a great weekend.
Mmmm, very hot!
ReplyDeleteLOL. Thanks for stopping by, Ruth.
ReplyDeletelovely- Kissing really is the most intimate act between two lovers, isn't it?
ReplyDeleteIt sure is, LB. Thanks for stopping by.
ReplyDeleteHi,
ReplyDeleteOh boy, was that a sensual hot kiss and heart-stopping moment! ;) Nicely done.
best
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Oh yeah! Very nice and not venturing way into naughty. Liked the description of his reaction to her.
ReplyDeletepass me a fan!
ReplyDeletegreat read, thanks
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Thank you, Francine and JL. No naughties this time. :)
ReplyDeleteHi Laura, thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it. ;)
ReplyDeleteYeah, I'm with Laura. Where's something to fan myself with? Phew, a hottie. And a heart stopper! D
ReplyDeleteThank you, Denise. :)
ReplyDeleteAww...the man is falling in love :)
ReplyDeleteWhy do I suddenly need a drink with lots and lots of ice?
ReplyDeleteYou might want to expand this a little: "He could see the outline of her body underneath it. His heart stopped for a moment." Have him describe what he sees - ripe breasts, slender legs, etc. You do such a lovely job describing his POV of her eyes, her skin, but it's the sight of her body that sends him to kiss her.
Going to get that drink now.
Myne, he sure is. He just doesn't know it yet. :)
ReplyDeleteThanks, Beverly. You have a valid point. It's the sight of her whole body he can't resist.
Be Still my heart ....... whew!
ReplyDeleteHi Raven, I'm glad you like it. Thanks for stopping by. :)
ReplyDeleteI liked the description of her clothes like transparent gossamer in the light. That would be a heart stopper!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Madeleine. I thought so too. :)
ReplyDeleteGreat stuff. A kiss can be a heartstopping moment, I can still remember reading Jane Eyre as a teenager and swooning when Rochester kissed her!
ReplyDeleteThat was yummy :-) I do like to read a good kiss.
ReplyDeleteit was like...OMG. i mean O M G......;)
ReplyDeletepheww............i need to stop my heart beating so fast....:P
slowly it was just proceeding and kept on the whole story line and boom it cames and completely stops your heart..........
amazing, splendid and dude i don't have words now.:)
Thank you, Cara, Li and Life. A great kiss should be a heart-stopper, I think. :)
ReplyDeleteNice and steamy, just the way I like it. Its always heats up when they break their own rules.
ReplyDeleteHi Ms Queenly, it's great when they break their own rules. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for stopping by.
ReplyDeletei wish i could get such a kiss like now.great work Kiru
ReplyDeleteHi Anonymous, I hope your wish is granted. ;)
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