Also, the month of July marks one year since I signed my first publishing contract which was for His Treasure, Men of Valor series, #1. It is also a year since I started this blog, so there are lots of reasons to celebrate this month.
To kick off the celebrations, I'm sharing a short story I wrote for Breathless Press birthday bash in August. But all of you as my loyal followers and readers get to read it here first. Lucky you!
What I'd love though is your feedback? Let me know your thoughts about the story, characters, etc. It is currently unedited so all your feedback will be taken into account during revisions.
Without further ado, let me introduce you to chapter one of Her Protector, Men of Valor series, #3.5. Happy Reading!
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Igboland, West
Africa pre-colonization
Oma stood across
the courtyard, hidden in the shadows beside the palace barracks long house. It was
a dark night, the silver moon hidden behind ominous clouds. The air stirred. Leaves
rustled in the shrubs behind her.
Pulse thumping, she pushed her back
into the cool mud wall and glanced behind into the dense foliage. In the gloom
she couldn’t see much. Crickets chirped. An owl hooted.
Body frozen, ears pricked up and
breath held, she stood still waiting for someone to spring from the bushes.
Nothing happened.
Exhaling the breath nearly
busting her lungs, she returned her gaze toward Prince Emeka’s quarters.
The head guard, Jide stood
outside talking to another of the prince’s guards. The square was lit with
bare-flamed lamps hanging on wall sconces several feet apart. From her vantage
point she couldn’t hear the men’s conversation but she could watch them
unobserved.
The two men were a contrast of
light and shadows. But she easily recognized their outlines.
Lofty like an iroko tree, Jide
stood a head taller than his colleague. His skin was of the darkest ebony and
his bulky muscles tight and hard.
For a moment she remembered the
several occasions she’d walked past him or stood close to him. She’d always
been tempted to touch his skin and find out if it was as firm as it appeared.
A warm shiver crawled down her
back. Heat travelled to her belly. A slow ache erupted at her core.
The sound of conversation drew
her back to her location. Her spine stiffened in alertness. Soon the
conversation died away as the people talking walked by her without noticing her
skulking in the shadows.
She glanced back to where the
guards stood together.
Jide turned and stared in her
direction. Her breathe hitched as his gaze seemed to connect with hers. She pressed
her bare back against the wall, the rough stones scratching her skin.
Surely he couldn’t see her.
She stood still making sure no
part of her body was exposed. And held her breath for several moments, her
heart pounding in her chest.
After a while he shook his head,
said something to his colleague and walked away.
She let out a deep breath
grateful he hadn’t seen her.
The last thing she wanted was to
be caught before she’d achieved her objective.
She had specific instructions to
carry out. Her brother’s well-being was at stake.
After another moment, the other guard
walked off in the other direction. She knew he’d gone off on patrol and
wouldn’t return for a while. She’d monitored their routine for a few nights.
This was her chance to act without
being noticed.
With haste she glanced left and
right across the courtyard. Keeping to the shadows as much as possible, she crept
to the prince’s chambers. With each step her heart raced, her hands clammy with
fear.
It didn’t matter how often she’d
done this. Each time fright and nervousness gripped her.
The last thing she wanted was to
be caught. The penalty for spying was severe.
Yet she couldn’t help it.
Briefly, she stopped outside the main
entrance to the prince’s chambers. She turned and looked behind. No one else
was out there. Pulse still sprinting, she wiped her clammy hands against her
light cotton wrap skirt and peered into the prince’s obi.
The chamber was dark. All the
lamps extinguished.
The gloom worked well for her
well as she could evade notice more easily. However it would be more difficult
to move through the room with speed. She needed to accomplish her task and be
gone as quickly as possible. She also needed to walk through the room based on
her memory not sight.
Luckily she was one of the
maidens that served the heir to the throne and his family. So she’d been in his
chambers frequently.
But never under the cloak of
darkness.
She took a step in and tried to
remember where all the furniture was located so she didn’t knock into anything
and rouse attention. When her eyes adjusted to the night, she could see the
outline of the chairs and the prince’s throne on the far end of the wall.
Then she noticed the entrance to
the private inner chamber.
There was no light or sound
coming through the door. Had the prince retired early for the night?
Feeling emboldened by the
darkness and silence, she took a step forward in the direction of the inner
chamber.
Before she could take a second
step, strong arms wrapped around her waist and lifted her off the floor. She
gasped, knocked breathless as her body rammed into an immovable hard object.
She twisted her body to look, mouth
opened ready to scream.
“Don’t make a sound.”
The rumbling masculine voice was
harsh and low. A mere whisper. Yet, there was no mistaking the command.
Nor the owner.
Jide.
The palace chief guard. The last
person she wanted to encounter tonight.
Apprehension dropped into her
stomach like heavy boulders. Still, she lifted her chin bravely and glared at
the looming, dark man holding her against his rigid body. Excitement flared in
her core.
In the darkness, she could barely
make out his expression but guessed it would be stern and unforgiving.
Same as always.
“Put—“
“I warned you.”
Before she could do anything, his
lips descended on hers.
Stunned, she opened her mouth to
protest. He took advantage and gained entry with his tongue.
For a moment she was unsure of
what to do. And froze.
Never had she been involved in
such an act before. Mouth fused with mouth.
Intruding on one of her friends
kissing her betrothed was not the same as living it. Feeling it as she did now.
No man had ever pressed his lips against hers. Her body had never felt these
alien sensations currently invading her.
Jide's tongue danced atilogu
in her mouth, wrecking havoc on her senses. His mouth tasted like udara fruit,
sweet and rich. His scent was of the fresh earth after a rainy day.
For the first time in her life,
she was aware of her feminity. Aware of heat coursing through her body. Aware
that she wanted to yield her body to this man.
When he turned his head,
deepening the kiss she let out a soft moan and yielded to the feelings of
confusion and excitement. All he did was hold her to him and kiss her. Still her
body bloomed. She snaked her arms around his shoulders clinging on tightly. The
slow burn of fervor warmed her insides.
Abruptly, he released her body
and her bare feet hit the hard earth. In that instant, she missed his touch.
His heat. His kiss.
Disorientated, it took her a
moment to realize they were no longer in the prince’s quarters. They stood
outside, in the dark corner of the courtyard where she’d been spying on the
guards previously.
“Are you suddenly speechless?”
Jide asked, his voice dangerously low.
Her cheeks flushed with
embarrassment. Fear and excitement made her body tremble.
She stiffened her back, quelling
her body’s quakes. Digging into her reserves of boldness, she stared up at the
fierce-looking sentinel who towered above her.
Even in the dim light, his
features were striking.
Jide didn’t have the proud
handsome features of the Prince of Umunri. Rather it was as if Chiokike,
the god of creation, endowed him with intense features in preparation for his
life as a warrior—to frighten his opponent, instead of to attract attention.
Yet, his dense curved brows, eyes
the color of the blacksmith’s furnace, strong wide nose and full sensual lips
drew her to him each time. Even now she was mesmerized by him.
The rest of his physique was
superb. She could now attest to the firmness of his bulky musculature. She had
felt their solidity when he’d held her to his body.
Oma had lived through eighteen
New Yam festivals. In that time, she’d never met any man like Jide. He was the
most feared of the palace guards and the heir’s most loyal sentry.
If you want to live through
another eighteen festivals you have to get away from him.
Remembering where she was and her
situation, she bit her cheek to stop being distracted.
“You caught me unawares,” she
retorted.
Angrily, she stared at him. He
lifted his lips up in a half-smile. She looked away, conscious of the way his
amused knowing gaze seemed to bore into her mind.
“Now I have to return to my
quarters.”
Thinking to get away quickly, she
turned, her feet ready to flee.
“Where do you think you’re going?”
He grabbed her arm, stopping her
before she could take a step away.
“I’m not done with you, yet.”
Her cheeks flushed with heat
again at his words’ implication.
“Do not think I will allow you to
maul me like you did a little while ago,” she injected disdain into her voice.
A low chuckle erupted from Jide.
He sounded like a man who was out of practice with laughter. She’d never seen
him laugh before now.
“You did not resist the last
time. As I recall, you were positively speechless. For the first time ever from
what I know of you.”
“Do you imply I’m a chatterer?”
Intentionally, she ignored the
implication that he observed her activities. It couldn’t be. A man of his
station had more important things to do than watching a maiden go about her
duties.
“On the contrary. I merely refer
to your refusal to obey my instruction in the Prince’s chambers. Why were you
there in the first place?”
She had practiced her response in
event of being caught out. Yet in front of this domineering sentry who seemed
to see through her, she stuttered. “I—I went to retrieve the rest of the dinner
utensils that I forgot earlier.”
“You are certain of this.”
“Of course,” she replied.
Flustered, she continued speaking to cover her nervousness. “I was plainly not
aware the prince had retired for the evening. It was not my intention to
disturb him. You must admit it is unusual for the prince to retire this early.”
“It is none of your concern what
time the prince of Umunri retires for the day, maiden.” For the first time that
night, Jide’s tone was harsh and reprimanding. She knew instantly she’d spoken
beyond her station.
“Forgive me for speaking out of
turn,” she said, her tone chastised, her head bowed to hide the tears that
threatened to cloud her eyes.
It was bad enough she’d been
caught where she wasn’t supposed to be. Now she seemed to have incurred the
wrath of the chief guard. She had failed in her mission tonight. And the
consequences would be terrible.
“Oma, you are forgiven,” he said,
his resonant voice losing its harshness.
He lifted her chin. The calluses on
his fingers grazed her skin, searing it as his fiery gaze held her captive. For
a moment, she thought he was going to kiss her again. To her chagrin, she
wanted him to kiss her. She hoped it meant she had escaped punishment for her
offenses this night.
“But I do not believe your reason
for going to the prince’s chamber,” he continued, his words sinking her hopes
along with her heart falling into her belly. His gaze was stern again.
“To be certain you do not attempt
it again tonight, you will stay where I can keep a watch over you. Or are you
going to tell me the truth?”
“I—I told you the truth already.”
Her nervousness returned along with her body’s trembling. Her heart pounded in
her chest in a quick tempo. She wondered if he could hear it.
“Right, you will come with me
then.”
Suddenly rage coursed through her
veins at being planted in this precarious position in the first place. Her
annoyance was compounded because only moments previously the now implacable Jide
had made her feel something no one else had ever elicited from her. Making her
think perhaps there was more to him that his forbidding exterior.
Now he would extinguish the light
of hope he’d lit in her.
“I’m not going anywhere with you,”
she replied irritably and clenched her fists at her sides.
He grabbed her arm. She wriggled
and pulled but couldn’t get away. She opened her mouth to protest.
“Don’t even think of making a
noise. Otherwise I know exactly how to shut you up.”
Remembering exactly how he’d shut
her up previously, warmth travelled up her body and stung her cheeks. She
couldn’t allow him to kiss her again. She needed her mind unconfused.
Clenching her fists, she gritted
her teeth and nodded instead.
Smiling victoriously, he tugged
her arm. She followed him like a festival goat about to be slaughtered.
Copyright Kiru Taye 2012
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Here is a visual glossary of terms.
Udara fruit
Atilogu dancers
Iroko tree
I love it! I like the use of native words and cultural references/analogies you injected.
ReplyDeleteBTW, what is udara? When I googled it the explanations I found don't match the way you used the word here.
Thank you, Delaney. I've added a visual glossary to help readers. :)
ReplyDeleteUdara is a sweet fruit available in South Eastern Nigeria. See picture above.
Thank you! Very helpful.
DeleteLove it.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Henza!
DeleteLove it! I liked the visuals you gave for the native language. I can't wait to read more of this. I saw one thing you may want to look at:
ReplyDeleteThe gloom worked well for her well as she could -- the second well isn't needed. Looks like you rearranged the sentence and the well got left in. :-)
You do an awesome job setting the scene and showing the emotions.
I'm glad you enjoyed reading it, Rhonda. My first chapters tend to be wobbly to start with but I'm happy how this one flowed easily.
DeleteI'll amend the error. Thanks. :)
Hi Kiru. You've created wonderful tension in this scene. I'm wondering why she's spying, which is the page turner here, as well as the simmering kiss with more sure to follow.
ReplyDeleteYou said this is unedited, so you don't need me to tell you there's a few things that could be improved IMHO. I hope you don't mind.
Only one spelling mistake I caught - 'femininity'.
There is a bit of repetition - early on she 'pressed her bare back against the wall' then she does the same later. Maybe you could change the second phrase a bit.
Two 'other guard' and 'other direction' in close proximity.
'This was her chance to act'. (I'd finish there.)
'The gloom' paragraph - two 'mores'.
'Clammy hands' repeated in 2 paragraphs.
There were some similar things but no doubt you'll catch them when you edit. Maybe I've saved you a little time.
This is going to be another excellent story I'm sure.
Denise
Hi Denise, I'm glad you enjoyed reading this. I'm enjoying writing this story. Some stories just flow easier than others.
DeleteThank you for pointing out the errors. You've saved me some hard work. :)
HI KIRU! THIS WAS AWESOME AND CAN'T WAIT TO READ MORE!!
ReplyDeletelinda_bass@sbcglobal.net
Simply captivating. I love Oma. Funny, that's my daughter's name, too. And I love the fact that she is so naive. I always fall for such heroines. My best lines:
ReplyDeleteshe remembered the several occasions she’d walked past him or stood close to him. She’d always been tempted to touch his skin and find out if it was as firm as it appeared.
And:Oma had lived through eighteen New Yam festivals.
Unique writing. Well done!
Thank you, Netty and Linda. More coming soon.
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