tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-504800520107358646.post4643629932764962141..comments2023-12-16T08:34:19.484+00:00Comments on Kiru Taye Writes: RFW - She Wears My RingKiru Tayehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03285263322486836620noreply@blogger.comBlogger15125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-504800520107358646.post-13152370819281721752012-04-09T07:08:29.135+01:002012-04-09T07:08:29.135+01:00All I know is I wanna read more of this story!
Fi...All I know is I wanna read more of this story!<br /><br />First time here and loving it!001https://www.blogger.com/profile/17880087208391938035noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-504800520107358646.post-53871185523709048802012-03-29T04:56:12.221+01:002012-03-29T04:56:12.221+01:00Hi Kiru
Great job, fits the theme, I wanted more. ...Hi Kiru<br />Great job, fits the theme, I wanted more. This is a nice lead into a novel and you did say it was an excerpt. I like how you allowed the female character's self doubt to bring out the protective instincts in the male character.<br />NancyN. R. Williamshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02174506528962095858noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-504800520107358646.post-48758827557869213452012-03-28T19:37:30.478+01:002012-03-28T19:37:30.478+01:00It had a pleasant flow throughout with the right ...It had a pleasant flow throughout with the right amounts of romance, intriguing details passed on to the reader making them what to know more. Is there more to the attraction or is it make the most of each other availability? Need answers...Rek Seshhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13484322426994645221noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-504800520107358646.post-51998567860674122802012-03-28T02:17:10.377+01:002012-03-28T02:17:10.377+01:00Hello Kiru.
I don't think there are any of you...Hello Kiru.<br />I don't think there are any of your RFW entries that I haven't enjoyed. This fit the theme perfectly. It's got the romance, the sensuous sizzle and a storyline full of intrigue. I would certainly love to know more! Nice entry again. Thanks for sharing.<br /><br /><a href="http://thoughtsofbeautyinthestillnessofdawn.blogspot.com/2012/03/beloved.html" rel="nofollow">The Beloved</a>The Poethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00667034322952126127noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-504800520107358646.post-2026554637049160362012-03-26T07:54:28.160+01:002012-03-26T07:54:28.160+01:00Ahhh, I'm thinking .... good/bad guy trying to...Ahhh, I'm thinking .... good/bad guy trying to convince smitten lady that she is all he has on his mind. Easy-Breezy when you tell them what they want to hear.<br /><br />Callused hands has me wondering though. She doesnt mind?? Women don't mind?Think-About-Ithttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04361623292147095716noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-504800520107358646.post-48916483925909561362012-03-25T18:17:50.564+01:002012-03-25T18:17:50.564+01:00Yep, it works, Kiru. Clever take on the theme. Ann...Yep, it works, Kiru. Clever take on the theme. Anna sums it up nicely. Cracking plot. Certainly want to find out more.Adura Ojohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10787703060107491771noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-504800520107358646.post-18176859998249485372012-03-25T16:46:24.590+01:002012-03-25T16:46:24.590+01:00Kiru,
This definitely fits the theme and the ring ...Kiru,<br />This definitely fits the theme and the ring sucks us in. Then we find out this is pretend, but maybe not pretend and we wonder about the characters. Give us more.Scheherazadehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08906467791904395295noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-504800520107358646.post-21770770766050369272012-03-25T04:43:09.370+01:002012-03-25T04:43:09.370+01:00Hi Kiru. You're getting some interesting criti...Hi Kiru. You're getting some interesting critiques there. I love this as I always love your characters. You managed to get us feeling all cuddly with the lounge scene, and then whammo, this is just a convenience. You've created a nice dose of tension here in few words. <br /><br />Write on Kiru.<br /><br />DeniseDenise Covey https://www.blogger.com/profile/07106490051555233439noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-504800520107358646.post-3809590931895295302012-03-24T11:33:33.025+00:002012-03-24T11:33:33.025+00:00Plus points:
-Lots of romantic tension
-Lots of e...Plus points: <br />-Lots of romantic tension<br />-Lots of emotion<br />-Result is a "tingling scene" <br />-Excellent choice of romantic descriptive phrases, that don't work as trite or cliché-wise.<br />-Fits into theme very well<br /><br />Minus points (only my unqualified opinon):<br />- Paragraph 8 needs to be separated into two paragraphs. <br />- Female character seems a touch too emotional for my tastes, but then again I don't know her full background, and I realise that I'm in a very small minority of romance readers who don't care for super-high romantic tension. I know. I know. This is the stuff that sells books. (So, it's not really a minus point, afterall).Celeste Neumannhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06121686507934885254noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-504800520107358646.post-6087791735532487452012-03-24T10:06:43.427+00:002012-03-24T10:06:43.427+00:00A relationship of convenience; with potential to g...A relationship of convenience; with potential to get much more involved. Yeah, I'd read on. I'm always engaged with your characters Kiru; your write strong, emotive characters, even when life is not always perfect.<br /><br />there is a lot of story potential behind these character's words and interractions. I do wish to read more. This is full of passion and intrigue.<br /><br />.......dholedolorahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08715849844092553699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-504800520107358646.post-35919653833956124902012-03-23T18:13:03.914+00:002012-03-23T18:13:03.914+00:00I have said Kiru Taye at work just messes up the d...I have said Kiru Taye at work just messes up the day...how am I going to concentrate on stuff now?Nhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05692119751692151354noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-504800520107358646.post-16276122838887521992012-03-23T17:32:21.022+00:002012-03-23T17:32:21.022+00:00Passionate! I like the uncertainty that makes the ...Passionate! I like the uncertainty that makes the reader want to know how they resolve their issues.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-504800520107358646.post-36111083871193088002012-03-23T16:42:55.181+00:002012-03-23T16:42:55.181+00:00Yes it does, and yes i wanna read more!!!Yes it does, and yes i wanna read more!!!Teenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-504800520107358646.post-69808291351644580372012-03-23T15:16:38.339+00:002012-03-23T15:16:38.339+00:00Works well, would definitely want to read more.Works well, would definitely want to read more.Keminoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-504800520107358646.post-69067425897638050002012-03-23T13:09:40.550+00:002012-03-23T13:09:40.550+00:00Oh yes! It works with the theme; and you have cert...Oh yes! It works with the theme; and you have certainly made the reader (me) want to find out what happens. In my opinion, this is a well written snippet that fits the theme!<br /><br />I get the feeling that they have made a deal to pretend to be engaged and he seems to like her more than he should. She is worried about being used, which is often what happens.<br /><br />You've got the makings of a great romantic plot here!<br /><br />Best wishes,<br />Anna<br /><br /><a href="http://annas-adornments.blogspot.se/2012/03/she-wears-my-ring-romantic-friday.html" rel="nofollow">Anna's RFW-challenge No. 34 'She wears my ring'</a>Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17926688000745346961noreply@blogger.com